In every sigh
on edge of those
porous breaths,
rests a subtle
suffering, grief
of parting, a
doomed sense
of loss of million
tiny breaths
conceived in
hollow airs
but warmed
in ashes of
mine coral
embers fueled
of inflammable
maroonish liquid
that runs its
course through
nitrogen cold
Veins, while
body fades out
once, those
delicate breaths
burn out every
minute!
Oh…sigh…so filling and rich…meeting every need.
Really well done Tanya!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Bill how very kind of you to shower such words of praise, truly humbled.🙏
You, my friend, are so truly deserving!
You make me happy Bill!
🙂 !!
My pleasure!
🙏
Very sad and poignant.
But beautifully written.
Thanks Dracula, this thought just came to my mind and penned in 5 minutes, I’m glad you liked it. Humbled 🙂
Boss. Goosebumps. Hats off. Felt like a scene straight out of an art movie
I am so glad that you liked it, truly humbled by your kind words! You make me happy 🙂
Hehe. You are magic with words . I think you will be good screenplay writer for a movie ,if you attempt to be one.
Well that’s a big compliment and I must say I m flattered, screen writing ✍️ hmm 🤔 interesting!
You can start with short films.
Sure but who will sign me?
Cant say. It’s upto your reach.
Sure let’s see
There on Instagram ? Can we connect?
Well I am afraid I am not😬
Any mode to connect. Would be interesting to have a conversation with you
You can contact me through my mail here
Cool
Mailed
Nice Tanya
Thanks a lot my dear for reading, hope you have been doing good. Have a great week ahead.
Wow. Simply gorgeous. So well done
Thanks a lot Shantanu, how very kind of you!!
My pleasure always
🙏
Masterfully done.
Thanks a lot Sunil for your kind read, truly appreciate it.
Some sort of suffering never ends…and sometimes we want put a full stop to it..
Tanya, how beautiful you have arranged the painful emotions in a flow..!!
Wonderful!! 👌
Absolutely, grief lingers on sometimes. I am glad you liked it!
Loved the word play and the way you have opened your poem with porous breaths. Just stunning.
I just envisioned breaths parting me Megha, and a sense of doom took over a grief of parting hence this poem. I’m so glad you liked it. Truly appreciate it!
Yes you portrayed it ewally well. I can sense the grief and the poignant mood in this poem.
So hot, Tanya! Beautifully expressed!
Thanks alot my dear Winnie, how very kind of you :). Truly appreciate it!
You’re welcome, Tanya!
This thought of losing breaths came to my mind and the association of gloom, hence went ahead and penned it!
Beautiful.
Thanks Jared for your kind read, truly appreciate it!